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November 15, 2007, 04:24:22 PM

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« on: November 15, 2007, 04:24:22 PM »
this is a prologue to a story i am writing its called fall of a soldier so enjoy
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November 15, 2007, 04:29:23 PMReply #1

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Re: my stories
« Reply #1 on: November 15, 2007, 04:29:23 PM »
Post the story, don't attach it.
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November 15, 2007, 04:35:17 PMReply #2

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« Reply #2 on: November 15, 2007, 04:35:17 PM »
okay :-\
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November 15, 2007, 04:39:38 PMReply #3

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« Reply #3 on: November 15, 2007, 04:39:38 PM »
arb do you even plan to read it
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November 15, 2007, 05:44:54 PMReply #4

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« Reply #4 on: November 15, 2007, 05:44:54 PM »
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November 15, 2007, 06:08:48 PMReply #5

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« Reply #5 on: November 15, 2007, 06:08:48 PM »
At the beginning putting non-stop and then stopped in the same sentence sounds weird.

Quote from: Kratas on November 15, 2007, 04:24:22 PM
they hadn’t known we’d known they were following us,

the two knowns are a little weird as well

Also the last sentence is a little long, break that up a little
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November 15, 2007, 07:31:33 PMReply #6

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« Reply #6 on: November 15, 2007, 07:31:33 PM »
Well, i'll just add some constructive criticism like everyone else.

Quote from: Kratas on November 15, 2007, 04:24:22 PM
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why do u hate america? if it were not for us u guys would be lost. i mean we invented the tv, we invented the internet, cars and we even went to the planet moon. we won all the wars and we always help the little countries who cant fight and we give food to poor people.
November 15, 2007, 08:27:57 PMReply #7

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« Reply #7 on: November 15, 2007, 08:27:57 PM »
Nice. The only problem that I see, that hasn't already been stated, is that the battle scene could be a little more exciting.
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November 16, 2007, 12:35:51 PMReply #8

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« Reply #8 on: November 16, 2007, 12:35:51 PM »
it is a prologue a experiment to whether i should write more after all this im thinking not and if i do im keeping it to ueaw they appreciate my work
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« Reply #9 on: November 16, 2007, 03:32:40 PM »
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November 16, 2007, 03:45:15 PMReply #10

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« Reply #10 on: November 16, 2007, 03:45:15 PM »
Quote from: Kratas on November 16, 2007, 12:35:51 PM
it is a prologue a experiment to whether i should write more after all this im thinking not and if i do im keeping it to ueaw they appreciate my work

You'll never do anything good if its reviewed by people that only say nice job
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November 16, 2007, 04:27:56 PMReply #11

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« Reply #11 on: November 16, 2007, 04:27:56 PM »
i really dont like you people any-more
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November 16, 2007, 04:40:56 PMReply #12

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« Reply #12 on: November 16, 2007, 04:40:56 PM »
Quote from: Kratas on November 16, 2007, 12:35:51 PM
it is a prologue a experiment to whether i should write more after all this im thinking not and if i do im keeping it to ueaw they appreciate my work

And we're only gonna show our updates and release our mods to the team.  :)
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November 16, 2007, 07:01:00 PMReply #13

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« Reply #13 on: November 16, 2007, 07:01:00 PM »
@ Kratas: Where did anyone say that they dont appreciate it?  The point of constructive criticism is to help you improve, the same way that constructive criticism of the mod is intended to ensure that the finished mod is as polished and balanced as possible.
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why do u hate america? if it were not for us u guys would be lost. i mean we invented the tv, we invented the internet, cars and we even went to the planet moon. we won all the wars and we always help the little countries who cant fight and we give food to poor people.
November 16, 2007, 08:48:01 PMReply #14

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« Reply #14 on: November 16, 2007, 08:48:01 PM »
Quote from: Arbiter on November 16, 2007, 04:40:56 PM
Quote from: Kratas on November 16, 2007, 12:35:51 PM
it is a prologue a experiment to whether i should write more after all this im thinking not and if i do im keeping it to ueaw they appreciate my work

And we're only gonna show our updates and release our mods to the team.  :)

lol
was that a UEAW diss?
they are so distant from the modding community.
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November 16, 2007, 09:47:30 PMReply #15

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« Reply #15 on: November 16, 2007, 09:47:30 PM »
No. He was saying that he was only going to post it where they say "great job". Thats like us keeping the updates and mods from people who might suggest that it could use some improvement.
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November 16, 2007, 10:08:38 PMReply #16

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« Reply #16 on: November 16, 2007, 10:08:38 PM »
There should be an "alright" option for the poll.
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November 17, 2007, 12:57:28 PMReply #17

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« Reply #17 on: November 17, 2007, 12:57:28 PM »
well to be honest i dont  even intend to download ueaw and your critiscism is appreciated oh and if you actually say you like my stories i'll post more
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November 29, 2007, 08:19:15 PMReply #18

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« Reply #18 on: November 29, 2007, 08:19:15 PM »
then why are you on their forums?

Use their when you're here. Otherwise people may take "our" to mean ThrRev rather than UEAW, seeing as you're obviously on the team here, but people may not know you're on the UEAW one... -Corey

Sorry my bad
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November 30, 2007, 02:10:02 PMReply #19

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« Reply #19 on: November 30, 2007, 02:10:02 PM »
right the main reason im signed up on the ueaw forums is because they have some fun topics like forum wars

does anyone wanna see another one of my stories its nothing to do with the first one but i like it and im writing another chapter of it


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