Thrawn's Revenge
Off Topic => The Lounge => Topic started by: Kratas on November 15, 2007, 04:24:22 PM
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this is a prologue to a story i am writing its called fall of a soldier so enjoy
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Post the story, don't attach it.
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okay :-\
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arb do you even plan to read it
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At the beginning putting non-stop and then stopped in the same sentence sounds weird.
they hadnt known wed known they were following us,
the two knowns are a little weird as well
Also the last sentence is a little long, break that up a little
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Well, i'll just add some constructive criticism like everyone else.
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Nice. The only problem that I see, that hasn't already been stated, is that the battle scene could be a little more exciting.
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it is a prologue a experiment to whether i should write more after all this im thinking not and if i do im keeping it to ueaw they appreciate my work
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it is a prologue a experiment to whether i should write more after all this im thinking not and if i do im keeping it to ueaw they appreciate my work
You'll never do anything good if its reviewed by people that only say nice job
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i really dont like you people any-more
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it is a prologue a experiment to whether i should write more after all this im thinking not and if i do im keeping it to ueaw they appreciate my work
And we're only gonna show our updates and release our mods to the team. :)
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@ Kratas: Where did anyone say that they dont appreciate it? The point of constructive criticism is to help you improve, the same way that constructive criticism of the mod is intended to ensure that the finished mod is as polished and balanced as possible.
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it is a prologue a experiment to whether i should write more after all this im thinking not and if i do im keeping it to ueaw they appreciate my work
And we're only gonna show our updates and release our mods to the team. :)
lol
was that a UEAW diss?
they are so distant from the modding community.
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No. He was saying that he was only going to post it where they say "great job". Thats like us keeping the updates and mods from people who might suggest that it could use some improvement.
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There should be an "alright" option for the poll.
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well to be honest i dont even intend to download ueaw and your critiscism is appreciated oh and if you actually say you like my stories i'll post more
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then why are you on their forums?
Use their when you're here. Otherwise people may take "our" to mean ThrRev rather than UEAW, seeing as you're obviously on the team here, but people may not know you're on the UEAW one... -Corey
Sorry my bad
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right the main reason im signed up on the ueaw forums is because they have some fun topics like forum wars
does anyone wanna see another one of my stories its nothing to do with the first one but i like it and im writing another chapter of it
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well heres the first part
Fall of a soldier
Anyone else would have been woken up in the explosion. It was a surprise to William that he